The Haberdashers’ Aske’s Boys’ School Elstree
For this task, we would like you to choose just one of the titles for your story. Remember to use interesting adjectives and words. Try to make it exciting and remember to punctuate your work.
The titles are : The Picnic
Paragraph 1: Introduce the picnic setting. Adjectives describing the green grass and the colourful blanket. Descriptions of colour. Descriptions of the food: the way it looks, smells, tastes and feels.
Paragraph 2: Introduce the people at the picnic. How are they feeling? How do they look happy, excited, cheerful? What's the weather like? Use exclamation marks (!) and lists (,) to show how cheerful everyone is.
Paragraph 3: Everyone is now eating and enjoying the food. Adjectives to describe the taste of the food. Children playing and laughing. Different sentence lengths.
It was a bright and sunny day. The emerald green grass was shining, and the golden sun was shimmering. The family sat around the gigantic picnic basket. Tummies rumbled as Mum opened the basket and began to remove all the food from within. There were grapes, cheese, sandwiches filled with ham, vegetables, and hummus. There were twelve different flavours of crisps! There was delicious chocolate and sugary sweets too!
Everyone gasped with happiness, excitement and awe! Children began to yell 'mine!' as Mum gave out all the food, sandwiches, chocolates fizzy drinks and fruit!
As I ate my yummy sandwich, which was bursting with flavour, I looked around and noticed how many people were having picnics just like us. The sun was warm and the grass was soft. We all felt so happy and content!
For this task, we would like you to choose just one of the titles for your story. Remember to use interesting adjectives and words. Try to make it exciting and remember to punctuate your work.
The titles are : The Best Birthday Present Ever
Paragraph 1: Before the present is revealed. Build some suspense and excitement. Use adjectives, such as colour to describe the box and how it looks before it is unwrapped.
Paragraph 2: A description of the present. Lists and exclamation marks which show to excited the son/daughter is!
Paragraph 3: How the present feels to touch and squeeze. How the son/daughter feels: amazed and excited/ can't wait to play with the new present. End on a cliff-hanger!
As soon as I saw the present, my tummy began to twist and turn. It was a large mysterious box covered in red, white and gold wrapping paper. As I touched the wrapping paper, it made a crackling noise that made me gasp. My tummy began to twist and turn even more! I felt sick but in the best possible way.
Mum and dad were watching me with beaming smiles. My hands were shaking as I opened the paper, carefully. The paper made a really loud ripping noise as I gently tore it open. I loved the sound of the paper tearing! I wished in that moment that the noise would last forever. I would remember that noise my whole life and it would bring a huge smile to my face.
The first thing I saw was soft fuzzy fur. Oh! It was giant, squidgy, cuddly teddy bear! My heart span and I screamed with joy. I heard my mum and dad laughing! The teddy was like a pillow, and I jumped on it, hugged it and squeezed it. Suddenly, I knew what I had to do next.
I would have to decide on a name for my wonderful new friend!